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Afsara: A Story in Fragments

So I wrote this story for creative writing class and the reaction wasn’t verypositive and I understand why, especially from a North American p.o.v. So I figured I’d post it here for your reading pleasure (maybe).

 

 

Afsara

My name is Afsara. I am not an angel.

There is no point in pretty words dressed up in golden shine tarted up splendor. No point in that. And no point in you. Or me. And yes, the syntax has gone haywire and there’s a definite lack of empathy for the apostrophe, why, we breathe capital letters at the end of sentences, fuck your conformity.

 

This is the story that tells you how to make a ghost. You take a girl. You take her in all the ways you know how and learn the ways you don’t. You take her and then you break her and then you leave her out in the rain during winter. Come spring, she’ll be a ghost. Gray. No matter what colour she started out as.

 

You killed my family and called it liberation.  You spilled so much blood that the ground bled for weeks afterwards. And while I was screaming myself hoarse not knowing who to mourn for first, you were being awarded medals for valor. How much courage does it take to kill one village full of women, children and old men?

 

Grief has the sharp taste of sour oranges. It numbs your tongue and steals your appetite. Grief is a symphony, a musical performance, each note designed to rip your heart out in a crescendo of little bulbs of pain.

Grief is the memory of a day perfectly frozen in the past. It is a song played on the radio. A voice whispering in the dark. It is a chipped blue china cup that your mother loved and that survived the carnage when she didn’t.

Grief is the memory of your last fight with your sister. The words you spoke when you shouldn’t have. The words you should have said but didn’t. Grief is that last smile she gave you, the smile that forgave you anyway.

And when the grief spills over, there is madness. Insanity is just a lullaby around the corner. It is the memory of how many smiles your lips used to be capable of that breaks you. Insanity is when your mornings drown in dew and the length of your fingers are all wrong and your eyebrows seem unable to make that climb down from your forehead back to your eyes – insanity is when you cannot hear yourself think because the grief inside your head is too loud.

 

I was recruited at the funerals. There was a woman whose smile had the jagged edges of a broken window. There was a man whose face was scarred diagonally as if someone had tried to cut through his face into his head. They told me that there were three stages to  grief: pain, numbness and acceptance. Acceptance? I laughed. You would have too. Then they collected the pieces of me that still remained and offered me a way to get even. They told me that if I followed them, I would be able to hurt you. So I did.

 

Sometimes I tie myself up in sentences and throw myself in bursts of black ink on pristine white paper. Ruining it. Making it as I am: smudged and unformed.

 

After I had banked the grief and could think again, I started to learn. Life had meaning once more. It had purpose and anger. The man with the scarred face took me to a place in the mountains where there were others like me. Girls poised on rooftops, cliffs and other precipices. There, they taught us how to fall.

 

My days were spent upended, suspended in a phantasmagoria. Reality peeked from behind the shabby curtains in a musty room belonging to someone who wanted to stay firmly entrenched in yesterday. We sought identities desperately in cups of tea that the English call their own but that actually belong to someone else. But who are we to deny the coolness of the shade during London afternoons when the entire world is in a teacup and scones glut themselves with clotted cream? Who were we then?  Little girls unlearning themselves. What have we become here in the mountains with the rage and the rain and the full stop to our lives a date marked in red on the calendar?

 

Briefly, I mourned us all. For the people we were and the dreams we had.

 

The training bore quick results and vans full of little girls leave the mountain house daily. They don’t come back. We don’t expect them to. Tomorrow is my day. It’s near. So near there are only minutes until the day reaches out with its ice cold fingers and traces the end on my skin, in lieu of the henna I will never wear.

 

It’s not a specific tragedy that steals the sleep from my eyes tonight – it’s the ever present realization, as soft as gossamer wings beating against bare skin – that there is a lack of language, a lack of heart and a lack of me in these words that keep getting colder. No dreams of heat. No feelings of passion. A cold blanket of eternity – a darkness without stars. Just an image of a thought falling apart on itself. A sharp separation of the soul from the body. These words, these cold words, the lack of passion – I have emptied myself of meaning. Who am I? what am i? why do I matter? Do I matter?

 

I want to talk about a candle. A lit candle in a dark room. Flickering in the breeze that wafts in through a window slid open. White, shabby curtains, the walls are gray stone. The candle does not give much light. Barely enough to illuminate the bed that is sparsely made with a faded sheet that has seen better days. The candle is halfway melted, the wax has accumulated on the earthen dish in which the candle stands. There is someone on the bed. A brown body, lying awake. Shorn hair, a white t-shirt, and pants bunched up at the knees. A young girl. She has thin unmarked arms, the scars are all inside.  She is lying on her chest and the only thing that breaks the silence is the gentle sigh of her breathing.

There are no pictures in the room, no personal decorations. Nothing that would indicate that someone lives here – except for a closet in the far corner of the room, away from the window. Carefully hidden in the shadows so that barely any light falls on it; it is immense. Made of mahogany with tall doors; grooved and padlocked. There is a chest inside the closet. A chest that contains the wrong sort of things. Windows, you can call them. Windows to another world.

The candle flickers, fights. There is a gust of breeze. The candle loses. The shadows deepen.

 

Fast forward then to ten hours later.

 

It is almost time. I have strapped the bombs around me. Theirs is a comforting weight.

It has been forty-five days and three hours  since I lost everything. Everyone. In an hour, I will burn.

Many people will die. Someone’s mother, someone’s father and someone else’s child. They will be mourned. It is too late to find my conscience. She died along with my sister. If it is hell that waits for me, then so be it. My anger will lift my feet and cover the distance from here to the middle of the field. Where you have gathered to celebrate your victory.

If there’s mercy, it will smell like smoke. I know that this world is pieced together by losses and life will move on despite the dictates of my broken heart. Nevertheless, I will burn. For the people I lost, for the country that is no longer mine and for you. Yes, you, snug in your belief of happiness and an ever after.

I was not born a monster. Remember that.

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4 thoughts on “Afsara: A Story in Fragments

  1. I still love this as much as I did the first time I read it—the gorgeous language (if it’s appropriate to call the language “gorgeous” in something so resonant with grief and anger) and the sharp characterization. You pack a lot of punch with an economy of words here. I am a greedy reader, though, and I always want more (does that make me Veruca Salt?) and could see this grow into a longer narrative piece, but maybe the impact would be lessened by doing that. You know what they say about opinions. You have to do what feels right for the piece and your intent.

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    1. I cannot write a longer piece, Jeffrey. It would kill me. Though I will probably write a novel with a protagonist who is in Afsara’s position but with considerably less emotion because this was one of the most difficult pieces I have ever written. Thank you for your kind words.

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